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Write as Tukwilla’s Youth of Arrival Write — 3 Comments

  1. Well, I sure like what you think about my exercise results, and since you asked and I didn’t say, here’s what I think of them: the distress I feel and probably why I don’t write poetry anymore, is that I simply have no idea where it comes from. You do know that my inner writer is pretty much in charge, which means discipline of thinking is really demanding, for me. If I work at it, I get nothing. So, is this free writing? It’s like singing, for me. If I’m troubled by the rules, like proper breathing, phrasing, enunciation, etc., my throat just stops cooperating and I lose any range I would have had. Likewise, this. If I try to make it happen, nothing. If I let it happen, you see it there. I suppose this, too, is part of natural-born, a hard thing over which to gain control. Like making a timeline for a memoir already written. Drudge! But you know, seing it finished on the page, I did say, Hey! That sure does make it easier! Why didn’t I think of that?! (You’re laffing again..)

  2. Bkayars,
    I am impressed! The rhythm and words in these lines are particularly haunting and strong: “I peer behind and see the preparation/Laid upon my then strong shoulders/Sagging now/To carry still the lessons yet to learn.” And I like the phrase “To finish clean.” I think making the similes helped in finding the strong, rhythmical language. Bravo! And thanks for showing us how the lesson works for any age.

    SB

  3. I haven’t written poetry in fifty years, so I’ll give only one of the exercises a shot:

    My Life is Like
    The chaos of a war
    When I had sought tranquility instead.
    In the winter of my years I wanted
    soughing breezes, not tornados.

    I peer behind and see the preparation
    Laid upon my then strong shoulders
    Sagging now
    To carry still the lessons yet to learn.
    I had thought for sure that
    School was out.

    The chaos asks for shuffling like
    A deck of cards, to give it order.
    I draw upon the decades of experience
    To finish clean
    Before the promised
    End.

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